حوار بدء العد التنازلي لاختبار الايلتس وهنا تحضيراتي

In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work mean is lead to several problems .Some people argue that it is good and useful , while others want to change this idea .In this essay I will discuss that it is not good for children .
Some people believe that it is as valuable work experience ,important for learning and taking responsibility .One reason is some poor people need to money therefore they are send their children to work .
Furthermore , some people want to teaching their children work because it useful to them in future . Moreover , they want to kill time for their children .Also they want to learn their children some skills about different work .
On the other hand , some people see that not good for the child because of several problem .First of all , may be their work lead to risk .
Secondly , the child need to more care and the softly life .Thirdly , some children suffer from their parents because of forced their children to work . Finally , it will effect on their study and lead to decrease in their study .

In my opinion I disagree with this . I think that it is the negative thing but if put the limited age for work between 12 to 14 possible it be best .In conclusion , I would say every thing has advantages and disadvantages , we must look at the positive side of it


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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work mean is lead to several problems

الجمله الاولى فيها جملتين بجمله واحده يعني شابكهم مع بعض
الشي الثاني انت استخدمت ثلاث افعال مع بعض فعلين اساسين وفعل مساعد..


كل جمله فيها فاعل وفعل اساسي فقط( في زمن معين يكون الوحده الفعليه مكونه من فعل اساسي وفعل مساعد مثل اار او از او هاف او هاز مع الفعل الاساسي)..

ممكن تصحح هالجمله بنفس المعنى اللي تبيه

In many country, children are engaged in some kind of paid work which leads to many problems.


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In this essay I will discuss that it is not good for children .

هنا لو تغير الجزء الاخير يكون أحسن .. لان المصحح يحاسبك على الذخيره اللغويه اللي عندك اللي تستخدمها
مثلا تقدر تقول
In this essay I will discuss the disadvantages of children labour and exploitation.

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Some people believe that it is as valuable work experience ,important for learning and taking responsibility .

هاذي الجمله رائعه لكن فيه خطا في استخدام آآز لو مثلا تغير التركيبه شوي تقول

Some people see children labour as invaluable work experience , important for learning and taking responsibility.


4-One reason is some poor people need to money therefore they are send their children to work .


التصحيح

One reason for this is that some poor people need money and , therefore, send their children to work.

عندك هنا خطا في استخدام الفعل في صيغه المضارع البسيط

اول شي صيغه المضارع البسيط هو كالتالي

S + V ( main verb)

فقط فعل واحد مش فعلين..

انت كتبت فعلين

they are send their children

وهذا خطا

الخطا الثاني ان هنا عندنا جملتين مكتملات بفعل وفاعل فلازم تربطهم باداه عطف .. في هذا الحاله آند ويستحب لما تحط ذيرفور في الوسط تبعدها عن الباقي بفواصل..


الخطا الثالث ان الفعل ( يحتاج) مايجي بعده حرف جر اذا كان بعده مفعول به
لكن اذا بعده فعل لازم يجي حرف الجر تووو

مثلا الستركشر على النحو التالي

I need to go
S + V+ to + V

I need something
I need water
I need money
S+V+ O


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