WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The graph below shows the four leading types of farming produce in Mitchford city between 1970-2000 .
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
Main produce in Mitchford – 1970 to 2000
Writing Lab 4, Task 1:
Sample Answer
(Time taken: approx. 15 minutes)
The line graph shows the amount of money generated from cotton, corn, wheat and sugar in the city of Mitchford from 1970 to 2000.
In the 1970s, the four types of produce were quite similar in terms of their economic contribution to the city. In fact, wheat remained a solid performer from 1970 to 2000 at around $45,000. Likewise, corn remained a fairly stable producer of income hovering around $30,000 in the 1970s, increasing gradually to a high of around $40,000 and then gradually declining to around $30,000 in 2000. Sugar experienced some significant growth from 1970 (around $25,000) to the mid 1990s (around $45,000) and remained at this approximate level to 2000. Cotton showed the greatest fluctuation moving from around $20,000 in the 1970s and mid 1980s to a peak of $90,000 in the 1990s. It declined as quickly as it rose falling back to 20,000 in 2000.
The information clearly shows that in the 1990s, cotton was a huge contributor to the Mitchford economy with the other 3 types of produce providing a consistent and steady income over the 30 year period.
(185 words)
Why this answer would score well
· good use of describing words (eg. "huge contributor", "consistent and steady" )
· good use of academic words (eg. likewise, significant growth, declined...quickly, a peak of, stable producer, fluctuation)
· good logical flow of information
· approximately 185 words (a little extra is good)
· good spelling and punctuation
Analysing Paragraph 1:
The line graph shows the amount of money generated from cotton, corn, wheat and sugar in the city of Mitchford from 1970 to 2000.
Notes:
· The subject of the question (farming produce) is written using a slightly different combination of words from the question (ie it the wording from the question is not simply restated).
· The 4 different types of produce are mentioned.
· The introduction covers all key areas:
- where (Mitchford),
- when (1970-2000),
- what (types of produce),
- how much (money).
Analysing Paragraph 2:
In the 1970s, the four types of produce were quite similar in terms of their economic contribution to the city. In fact, wheat remained a solid performer from 1970 to 2000 at around $45,000. Likewise, corn remained a fairly stable producer of income hovering around $30,000 in the 1970s, increasing gradually to a high of around $40,000 and then gradually declining to around $30,000 in 2000. Sugar experienced some significant growth from 1970 (around $25,000) to the mid 1990s (around $45,000) and remained at this approximate level to 2000. Cotton showed the greatest fluctuation moving from around $20,000 in the 1970s and mid 1980s to a peak of $90,000 in the 1990s. It declined as quickly as it rose falling back to 20,000 in 2000.
Notes:
· This paragraph focuses on clear, accurate descriptions of all 4 types of produce.
· The trends are organised in a logical way - from smallest change to largest change:
1. wheat
2. corn
3. sugar
4. cotton
· Organising the information in a clear way shows the examiner that you really understand the data you are analysing.
· Because it can be difficult to determine exact numbers on a line graph, totals are sometime expressed as "around" or "approximately" (eg: around $45,000).
Analysing Paragraph 3:
The information clearly shows that in the 1990s, cotton was a huge contributor to the Mitchford economy with the other 3 types of produce providing a consistent and steady income over the 30 year period.
Notes:
· This paragraph gives a logical conclusion which is clearly based upon the data from the table.
· The reader's attention is again specifically drawn to the 'two groups':
1. wheat, sugar, corn
2. cotton
· The information is accurate and brief.
How I developed this answer
(Time Taken: 3-4 minutes)
Step 1: Understand the question and the subject material
I read the question carefully and studied the subject material.
· I underlined the following key words in the question: 4 leading types, farming produce, Mitchford city, 1970-2000.
I would write the following summary notes on the test booklet:
· 3 similar - corn, wheat, sugar
· 1 different - cotton
I then started formulating my introduction.
Step 2: Identify Trends
Because there were only four (4) categories, I focused on locating the similarities and differences within them (this makes my answer easier to write!). I looked carefully for trends and immediately noticed that cotton was outstanding. I also noticed that the other farming produce (corn, wheat and sugar) were quite similar in terms of their economic contribution to the city of Mitchford.
Next I looked for differences within corn, wheat and sugar. I noticed that sugar experienced the biggest change, followed by corn and lastly wheat. I then decided I would present the information in a rank from smallest change to biggest change.
To help me better see the differences between the decades, I drew three straight vertical lines from each year.
This divided the graph into 4 sections and made it easier for me to see the differences in each decade.
Step 3: Decide on Conclusions and Outcomes
I knew that my conclusion would need to reinforce my comment about cotton in the 1990s and show how the other produce was stable.
I would write the following summary notes on the test booklet:
· cotton - big influence in 1990s
· corn, wheat, sugar stable contribution
Step 4: Plan and write your answer
Before I started writing I reviewed my notes and made sure that I had logically grouped my ideas and that they made sense. I re-read all the titles on the graph and made sure that the information I had written in my notes was correct. I asked myself, "Have I mentioned the key trends in the graph" and "Is the information logically grouped"? After checking again, I felt confident that I had.
As I began writing my introduction, I was very careful NOT to repeat the same wording in the question. Using my notes on the paper, I wrote my answer making edits constantly (I write my answers using a pencil). I tried to vary the length of the sentences - some short, some longer. I also was careful not to make any unsupported statement (I used the word 'generally'). I made sure I covered the key aspects/major trends of the graph. I divided up my answer into 3 paragraphs - introduction, analysis of graph and conclusion. Once I had mentioned all the points in complete sentences, I left myself 2 minutes to look for any spelling or punctuation errors by reading through the answer slowly.