Blue = corrected. Gray = Repeated sentences, ideas. Orange = Arabic slang.! "my brain will not work immediately "
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة معيده ومبتعثه
I suppose that your brain doesn't work until you drink coffee...
This is an Arabic slang, so try to say " I won't pay attention." or " I will feel sleepy". ATMOSPHERE : الغلاف الجوي
The envelope of gases surrounding the earth or another planet: "part of the sun's energy is absorbed by the earth's atmosphere". for strange and new information
Shouldn't you ask them about the class itself ?
if you say " I ask them for a strange and new information" then the first thing you will hear is " Weird"!
I know you mean "smart questions" and that's because you think in Arabic!
so you have to delete :
every class by asking them for strange and new information I have to drink something good like coffee
So you recommend to drink coffee because it's good ?
I don't think so, coffee it's not good for the body nor brain.
juice is good... but not coffee..
Try to rephrase the orange sentences, and delete the gray sentences ..
Resort your paragraph...
because you started in class ended up with sleeping early.
It'll be hard to catch up with the scenario ....
try to rewrite the scenario ( woke up early, breakfast, going to school, after school studing, then go home) overall, you are improving very fast... there is a big difference between this paragraph and the old one.
keep it up, and I believe you'll be better than me in a short time. (you'll be able to find my mistakes and you'll be my teacher )
محمد فهد .. 7 "
March 8th, 2013, 07:08 AM